you insert a piece of description in a narrative,
create atmosphere and better situate the story and the characters.
you start you need to:
- choose the narrator
- choose what
you want to emphasize in order to stress the details (remember the five senses:
sight, sound, touch, taste, smell so as to use the appropriate vocabulary
according to the impressions you want to create)
- choose the physical
location of the narrator vis a vis the scene he/she is describing (can he/she
move or not)
Read and observe:
needed right now was peace and quiet. I
chose the Abigail Butte County Library.
I always feel comfortable in it, and Miss
Babbit, the librarian, never suggests I
go to the children's room. She is smart
enough to see that if I like the main reading
room, that's my business. Probably, she is so glad to see someone
my age come in of her own accord that she wants to make sure I keep
course there's the quiet, broken only by
the rustles of newspapers
and magazines, or the gentle thud
of book on book, or the closing
of the file drawers, or the muted
voices of people up at the checkout desk.
Grimes - Cold Flat Junction (2001)
you learnt about the identity of the character/ narrator in each extract.
back to the hospital from Rosslyn
and got there in about fifteen minutes. I hurried
down to B-1 and found an area
marked DIAGNOSTIC TESTING. It was late,
almost ten o' clock. No
one was at the front desk, so I
walked right past and down a little blue corridor
that looked eerie and foreboding at
that time of night.
As I approached
a room with COMPUTARIZED TOMOGRAPHY and MRI lettered
on the door, a technician appeared
from a doorway across the hall. He startled
me - I was walking in a fog. Thinking,
worrying about Jannie.
I help you? Are you supposed to be down here, sir?"
Jammie Cross's father. I'm Detective Cross. She is having an MRI.
She had a seizure tonight."
nodded. "She's down here. I'll show you the way. I believe she's
about halfway through the test. Our last
patient for the night."
Paterson - Roses are Red (2000)
of place/time/framework, character
elements that establish the framework and belong to the same lexical
are the characters?
extra information: what the narrator perceives and time elements
elements which give us a glimpse to how the narrator reacts