When you insert a piece of description in a narrative,
you create atmosphere and better situate the story and the characters.

Before you start you need to:

Read and observe:


What I needed right now was peace and quiet. I chose the Abigail Butte County Library. I always feel comfortable in it, and Miss Babbit, the librarian, never suggests I go to the children's room. She is smart enough to see that if I like the main reading room, that's my business. Probably, she is so glad to see someone my age come in of her own accord that she wants to make sure I keep doing it.

And of course there's the quiet, broken only by the rustles of newspapers and magazines, or the gentle thud of book on book, or the closing of the file drawers, or the muted voices of people up at the checkout desk.

Martha Grimes - Cold Flat Junction (2001)


Point of View:


what have you learnt about the identity of the character/ narrator in each extract.




I rushed back to the hospital from Rosslyn and got there in about fifteen minutes. I hurried down to B-1 and found an area marked DIAGNOSTIC TESTING. It was late, almost ten o' clock. No one was at the front desk, so I walked right past and down a little blue corridor that looked eerie and foreboding at that time of night.

As I approached a room with COMPUTARIZED TOMOGRAPHY and MRI lettered on the door, a technician appeared from a doorway across the hall. He startled me - I was walking in a fog. Thinking, worrying about Jannie.

"Can I help you? Are you supposed to be down here, sir?"

"I'm Jammie Cross's father. I'm Detective Cross. She is having an MRI. She had a seizure tonight."

The man nodded. "She's down here. I'll show you the way. I believe she's about halfway through the test. Our last patient for the night."

James Paterson - Roses are Red (2000)

Indications of place/time/framework, character

- the elements that establish the framework and belong to the same lexical field

where are the characters?

- extra information: what the narrator perceives and time elements

- elements which give us a glimpse to how the narrator reacts