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"Heather, why did you leave?" by Hboles9 Why did you go in such a time of need? In honor of Heather Stocks Critiques: -I think this piece is a little too generic. It's obvious you have very strong feelings about the subject and you should let them flow. My advice is to write about Heather and things that stand out in your mind about her, what you liked about her, what maybe could have been better, why you feel so sad about her leaving. And try to base it in concrete things rather than just talking about feelings. It makes it come to life more. |