"Pressures" by *girl*

When you were a little boy,
When your mother named you Roy,
Your future was made,
By your father Wade.

You failed them when you changed your name to
Steve
And when you got loaded on New Year's Eve.

She wanted you to be a star,
He wanted you to be looked up to by afar,
She said you could be a King,
Once your Queen had on the engagement ring.

But again you failed them when you said you are
gay,
And left your Queen on your Wedding Day.

He told you to be rich,
Not to be living in a ditch,
She said you could be a child physician,
You make children laugh just like a magician.

Once again you failed them when you begged for
money with a soda can,
And lived with a stinky garbage man.

She wanted you to be happy,
And not sappy,
He wanted a son,
Not a fruit bun.

And for once and for all you failed them when you
committed suicide,
Because they didn't want a son that died.
The point of this is that when people put too much
presure on someone, they end up hurting
themselves, the person and the people associated
with them.

Critiques:

-The rhyme scheme comes out forced. Maybe the poem has too much pressure on it?
-I like the message it has.

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